Perfect rythm and flow...first attempt: your good. nice job holly!

Fantastic..I loved the flow of this. Please continue your amazing work. Love, Tim

Etheree's are my favorite! i love them! you did a beautiful job with this poem Holly! it's great seeing all these styles come from you! i love the last line very well done. (sorry i'm kind of behind on your poetry)

~Jacklyn

Oh wow, I love the last line, perfect! This is so sad, but beautifully conveyed!

I think it's good if this is your first stab at it
nice work

This is ny awesome poem! it looks really hard to write poems with that kind of structure keep up the good work!