I like the meaning behind the poem...but its doesnt flow...smoothly i guess....? and some of the lines were confusing...but still good
~bloodscars~

The idea behind this is good, but i agree with ~bloodscars~ about the flow. the content and concept though is very good.

This poem reminds me of my past thoughts. Freedom will come in time *winks*.

But as for the flow. I have to agree with the other commentors about the flow of things. Just do some rewording and rearranging and this poem will be perfect.

Hope I helped some, :-)

-Tony

Good poem and it's expressive... but like the other said it's a matter of time which u can be mature enough .... don't be upset things ganna change later on

I really like this it's really good and i can relate to this. keep going and if you really get tired then just act out.

To me I see it as freedom is earned throughout the years.....so don't abuse your chances meaning don't do anything stupid that could mess it all up (like some of my mistakes) the poem was good and many people could relate with it's meaning but your poems are not flowing the way they could.

~Retniapdoolb~

Sooo true im goin through this now with my mom im 18 now i should have more freedom...it freakin sucks as much things i do to make her happy =/...