Comments : Torn.

  • 18 years ago

    by Wolf

    It's A so-so ,i dont know,it sounded a bit like a pop song to me ,sorry for saying that i'm not trying to be an ass
    put you know,you included (baby)(my love) that were a bit of a turn-off
    and i felt the last line needs to be a little more powerfull
    overall it's good but im very needy in poems