Woah, those last two stanza's sent shivers down my spine. Where is everyone else? Shouldn't they be here? I really liked it (as you can tell), it's very well structed and worded. Every peice could use improvement, but I think this one is good as it is.

Good work.

-Tony

(5/5)

Ooo, very spine-chilling! Well done! And thanks for the comment!

Pretty good....i like it better than some of your others just because this one has has more depth and meaning. I think you're better off writing dark poems than life poems..you seem to get to people more that way. Keep up the good work. :D

-kristie