Wow once again you have amazed me, and i think you should keep the last section, its really good, you are very talented and i think these dark poems that you are writing are working very well indeed!

Very good peice, has a dark atmosphere about it. the last section is defantly the best part.

Dont replace its cool

OO Awsum job!! XD
One of the best iv'e seen in a while
I love your dark imagination
Your a wicked writter + this poem is great