That was a very good poem with a lot of emotions and definately original! and u put your own lil pizaz in it with the names of the children and everything. the only advice i have is to use more punctuation and in some parts of it, it seemed like u were trying to hard to rhyme. but overall this was a great peice and it definately deserves a 5/5!!!

Aw it's really deep. I can see how close you two really were. The plans you wanted to make. I'm sorry bout the way things turned out. I liked this lots. I feel the same way. good stuff =)