Comments : Snowflake Crystals

  • 18 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    I loved this, the snowflakes seemed metaphorical of people to me and their quest like the journey through life. Dazzling imagery...

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

  • 18 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Yes, you are exactly right lol.. im glad you noticed!

  • 18 years ago

    by The Angel of Secrets

    Very nice,
    I like it.

    Love,
    Line

  • 18 years ago

    by J Lau

    Good write. Simple subject yet cleverly written. Changes the reader's perspective of things, truly bringing out the meaning of appreciating the simple things in life. Great write! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    Great poem hunn..* I really like this stanza:

    when they reach the ground,
    will they remain?
    pile upon one another
    each keeping its neighbor safe

    ^^You made the snowflakes sound like a bunch of little people :) Hahaz..Sorry..

    Great job.. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Yeah, that was awesome, it flowed okay, and was a good read
    xxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    They make their decent.

    Descent has an s in it . .

    Great poem -

    slowly falling
    dancing, twirling

    I really liked those lines - it put a sound in my ear . . a sort of twinkling sound . . hehe The poem really absorbed me as a reader, so I could see the snowflakes in my mind, and I saw the many people milling around, uncertain in a shopping centre - don't now why - just came to me. Loved to read it, thankyou.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by azlan26

    Wow this truly was a beautiful and indepth image
    The 4th stanza particularily stood out the most to me
    The flow and vocabulary was well constructed
    Great stuff :)

  • 18 years ago

    by PS

    Wow this is great. i love how you use the snowflakes and i love this:
    upon reaching their destination
    they are reminded...
    their fate lays unknown to them

    actually i love the whole thing but that was one that i really liked. amazing job

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen Angel

    Great write! Such an obscure topis (how did you get the idea) and so wonderfully carried off, "will the cold wet ground entomb them.
    their very core of being
    washed away, with out a trace of ever existing" I can't help feeling that you aren't really talking about snowflakes (or maybe I'm just reading too far into it) an any rate I loved it, 5/5 x