Hey, another great poem, i really liked these bits,

'A gentle kiss,
From the bullets,
That sleep in your voice,
A tragedy in your choice'

and

'Speak your name,
For all I care,
A mouthful of blades,
An inflamed body invades.'

i really loved this poem, it's so intense and fiery!

keep writing!!!

great work, keep going.

xXx

Great poem. i agree with Kirsten, the anger works well in it.the lines:
'A gentle kiss,
From the bullets,
That sleep in your voice,
A tragedy in your choice'
are really powerful, good work:)
thanks for your comment too.xx

I can feel your pain and anger. i am sorry. i hope things get better. god bless and really well writen * xxx

Wow that was great, personally not my favourite writing style but I liked it. Good vocab and rhyme combination couple of things Id do like checking grammar but overall a great piece.

Hey,
first of all I would like to tahnk you for the comment on my poem. Now getting to this poem.. angry.. filled with angst, i loved it. the rhyme pattern was good, and well thoguth out. my fav stanza..
A gentle kiss,
From the bullets,
That sleep in your voice,
A tragedy in your choice.
great choice of wrods. keep writing
Monique

Thats really different, unique rhyme pattern, excellent vocab, a few lines dont seem consistent but I really like it. It has alot of potential.

I liked this poem, the rhyming was kinda different, I've never seen somebody write like that. But it was cool. Thanks for commenting again. I was just going through all the comments and I found yours. So thanks, and keep up the good writes! 5/5