Comments : Public and Padlocked - Parkour

  • 13 years ago

    by The Wingless

    Hey awesome poem, I love the rhymes. This is so cool, the meaning (or what I think it is) The flow, and the format of the poem. Great job.

  • 13 years ago

    by BloodScars

    I think alot of poems are hard to write on diffrent subjects but this was awesome there were a couple of rough spots but it was very easy to read ah
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Sondos

    Holy Moo! I love this. Brilliant work. I love the way you write. Well Done
    Sondos

  • 13 years ago

    by Minkus

    I thought this poem was cool, not sure precisely why. Like you said for my two, it just... works! Good job.

    -DJ

  • 13 years ago

    by azlan26

    Aaa the night
    the pheramone spray
    the poetry
    =]

  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    It was awesome, it was really a good read
    xx

  • 13 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Wow, yet again another great poem.. flows really nicely, and i love the subject :D

  • 11 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    "Everyday I pass that gate
    'No Tresspassing' Well it's too late
    I took a risk and climbed a fence
    And freedom is my sole defence
    You can't take my life away
    These streets are ours, and ours to stay
    Your legal standing will not hold
    How can this public land be sold?"

    ^^ "Tresspassing" -- "trespassing". "Defence" -- "defense". Those may not be misspelled, because of the difference in spelling between countries, but I thought I'd point those out, in case they are. In the second line -- "Well" shouldn't be capitalized. Rather, I think the line would look better as.. "No trespassing - well, it's too late".

    Those are the only things I can find that I would.. disagree with in the piece. Everything else, I like very much. It's very well written, and the rhymes are good. 5/5

    ``Briana