Comments : Forgetfulness

  • 18 years ago

    by Moose

    This poem is fairly good. Its got its feeling and all in it, but it doesnt flow that well. Try sticking with a regular stanza. ABCB, AABB, ABAB format.

    ABCB meaning the 2nd and 4th verse rhyme and the 1st and 3rd dont.

    The grass is green
    The Sky is blue
    Laying in bed
    Thinking of you

    That would be an example of ABCB. Try picking one of the formats and stick with it. You'll improve greatly. Other than that pretty good poem.