The heart is never truly fragile as it seems.5/5

Hey there,
this is a great piece of writing..alot of people could relate to it quite easily since every1 has been hurt by the opposte sex. well wonderful job. I would appreciate it if you read some of my stuff.. preferably my older stuff such as, Stolen Innocence or Insecurity. Thanks
Monique

I feel you on that one.

SABRINA DOLL!!! I MADE A NEW ACCOUNT....THIS IS IT ;)
XOXOOXOX

This is so well written and so full of emotions. whats sad is that it kinds reminds me of my current relationship. :'( oh well. this is really good. 5/5

Wow hun this is an amazing poem... i have to admit although i feel so weak, but i have tears running down my face, simply from reading that poem. I can relate so much right now..it hurts:'(
Im so sorry you feel like this..but please PM mme or anything if you ever need or would like. I think i could relate well..especially on this..

Much love
>torn -x.x.x-

Hey gal that was more than awesome!!!!!!!!!!!
its really gr8
keep it up
good luck ;)

Wow...yeah i guess alot there is to be confussed about(lol) okay the one to "ashley my sister" is my best friend. we r so close, we call eachtother sisters....kinda like u and me(lol)and the one on rape, thank god, is not about me!!! i was health class, and out topic of the month is sex/rape/abuse and alotta emotion poured outta me...had to write about it. now...the one on Matt...yeah thats true. i am kinda in denile that he hits me, but i couldnt keep the words in. but he moved waaaay up state, so its done. dont worry sweet heart.
see...u do no everything about me, dont worry. I LOVE U SIS!!!!!!!!!!!!

Awww Sabrina! So sad, I do hope that you are ok, not sure if I already read this one last time I was on, knowing me i will have done! I forget everything. lol. Love me xx

In this poem, I could defenitly feel your anger toward that person, but aslo that you were heartbroken, I love this poem because it makes me feel what you feel, even if i've never been in your situation. thats a very good and unique talent as awriter. I like the flow and and the way you put emotion into this poem. great job.

This was really good too. The way you worded it made it interesting, and it had a great flow to it. Wasnt too long and wasnt too short. It was just right!
I dunno if this helps but in the last line it says "You torn us apart" Maby you could change that too "you've torn us apart" or "you tore us apart" =]

luv natalie x-x

THAT"S EXACTLY LIKE ME AND SOMEONE I KNOW............hehe......you're such a good writer
xoxo
Cassie

I prefer your other poems...I am always and this didnt interest me as much...the repetition wore thin on me....

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