Comments : Fresh Start

  • 18 years ago

    by Pure Silence

    Hey,

    Awesome poem! You're first to lines paint a beatiful picture. Lol I cannot wait to hear more from you! lol, My names Jenn, I'm the head of fish bowl, Umm There will be ba bit of dealy until we accept your application because I need to run a few things by our assistants but I'd like to welcome you as our first member yay!! =) *is very excited* lol

    Jenn
    Sorry if this seems really odd =S

  • 18 years ago

    by Pure Silence

    Wow.... I should be ashamed of myself...look at all those friggen typos! 0_o I'm so sorry > _ < ' Bleh

  • 18 years ago

    by Monique

    Hey there,
    :(aww honey, this was a sad, but beautifully written poem. I like how you repeated teh third stannza again as the last one.
    Monique

  • 18 years ago

    by Fighter (Ariane L.)

    I feel like that too when i watch the snow fall at night, it's breathtaking! amazing poem!! it recreated that emotion perfectly (although i know that it wasnt the main subject of the poem lol)... welcome to the club!! hope you enjoy :D
    -xXx-

  • 18 years ago

    by Torn

    "If I could
    I would run so far
    To the depths of the remote
    Till I dont remember who you are"
    ^^i just had to show you my awe at those lines. They worked brilliantly together and has such a strong impact.
    Very well done i like this poem very much.
    I cant believe i haven't welcomed you yet..shame on me!!
    WELCOME to the FISHBOWL..it's gonna be the maddest club ever made:P Of course with jenn as the head:P
    Anyway..enjoy and keep writing.
    >torn x x x