I like how you added that big cliffhanger. You made it sound happy at the begining then sad at the end

Great poem.. Definitly deserves a five..

This is such a good poem

i feel the same way at times..
keep strong, we'll live through it all

i really can't explain it. but i like it a lot.

I really like the concept & meaning behind this poem. Great job! 5/5*

Wow, really great one here!! only thing id suggest to make it flow better is making the lines...

"my own little world it is black
my own little world i feel under attack"

to

"In my own little world Im surrounded by black
In my own little world I feel under attack"

thats just a suggestion though.. anyways... good job!