"Its is the most beautiful paradise
Created in your mind and feelings
Beyond anything that you have felt
It is unbelievable Heaven on Earth."

what a poem you've done here, it's great penned....very interesting!

gloria's glen

Well lets see I was sort of lost on the meaning for a little bit but thats probably my lack of focuse while reading it......you had alot of good lines and there is not really much I can say.....

~retniapdoolb~

Woah, somebody help me. My head is spinning.
This poem was so confusing. I enjoyed each line
But really I couldn’t understand the connection
Between some lines. This poem was really unique.
I hadn’t read such a poem before.
I liked the second & the forth lines in the first stanza.
The two last lines of the second stanza.
The two last lines of the third stanza.
The two last lines of the forth stanza.
This poem was really enjoyable to read I must admit.
Much love,
Marjan
P.S. my head is still spinning.

Great poem but did confuse me a little. Not sure i really understood some of it but great poem anyway. I like your style! :)

This is excellent... I loved it... 5 *

"Sometimes a nut splits as the trees are leaving"
Heh, nice.
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I'd try to add quotation marks around any statement that was spoken, like what Crocodile Dundee said, or "i see" said the blind man.
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This was a really witty poem! Whenever I start to win a debate with my dad he says that all my arguments are semantic ones, and around that point is where I give up... no point in trying to argue around that one.