Wow. What a nice use of words! It's very good. The end was very powerful. I loved it alot. I think you are very talented. Especially the use of words was brilliant!!!!

Well done!

Lotsaaaaaaaa love
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Well u didnt hurt my feelings at all. ur right the flow and ryhming isnt at all good. u could nvr stop me from writing poetry becuz u r jus one person and ur opionion is appreciated but to me what i think is more important.wow that sounds a lil mean. im glad that u toke the time to write such a long comment though...thanks for ur help ~valerie