Hey Larry,

About the poem: the stanza's I liked, alot, but the latter half of your poem was kinda random, where'd they go? Lol, Personally I like it when poems keep the same form throughout, so meh what ever lol. Diction was Kinda limited but used wisely, for a new poet you show great potenital,

Other Fun stuffs: Hello Larry, I'm Jenn, and I am the head of Fishbowl Club, I was happy to see your application. So let me be the first to say, welcome to the Bowl, if you need help, >torn apart, Fighter or Myself will be more then happy to assist you. I just ask a few things: A) you read the welcome thread in the club discussions, and 2) follow the rules of the club and site =) I hope you enjoy your stay...

Jenn

Thank you for the comment. This is one of my very first poems, and I was under a lot of stress when I wrote this poem.

I agree with Jenn all the way Larry...listen to her she is very wise when it comes to writting..she has helped me improve over the months and when she says shell be here to help you she means it...I would also like to welcome you to the Bowl...

My Name is Joclyn and ive been on PQ for almost a year...I hope you enjoy this site as much as I do...and Im also here to help as well...Keep up the good work...Joc

I liked your poem Larry. I completly see where you were going with that. I've been there. ~big huggles~

5/5 *sighs sadly....sadly i know this feeling all 2 well...

Im sure things will start goin back up on a high for u, this is sad but good