I love the use of 'I could' and the idea of walking straight
=] great poem

Nice use of words and full of love,,,

keep it up

luv,
Bharti

Impressive write. Now the pressure is on me to give a real review to help make this perfect for publishing. Great idea with the walking straight, the repetition of this kept that idea going through my mind throughout the poem, which was effective. Some good choice of words, and you used original ways of putting the issues across.
Critically, the only slight imperfections were on the second stanza, last two lines…I’m thinking maybe rewording, or moving the “with” to the last line, that’s up to you. It’s just those lines to me didn’t fit properly, if you know what I mean.
If I were going to be picky I’d say how about capitalising the first letter of the two lines that are currently in small case, just so they tie in with the rest of the lines.
A great poem, worthy of publishing, good luck.

Impressed! Well - not really, because I've come to expect nothing less of you . . but anyway! That's such a lovely poem (Beginning to repeat myself now!) All the things you could have done - and yet you just 'kept walking straight' :) I love reading your poems so much!

Peace. [Sole]

Wow kaylee, I really liked the way you wrote it. And
The repetition of “I could have done…” makes the
Poem even better. your talent in writing poems is
revealed when one read your poems. Keep it up.
Much love,
Marjan

Yeah, i love the use of "I could" throughout the poem, its cool. keep it up
xxx

Oh the gift of foresight....this was another brilliant poem. Keep writing...

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