I really love this poem. It has a nice flow, nice use of words. It's a fantastic love poem!

I especially love the first and third stanza. The second has a weird flow, when you say "then I lye on the ground... knees get weak"

But overall it's a wonderful poem! Well done! Keep writing and keep improving.

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Lotsaaaaaaa love
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I think that this poem shows real emotion and shows how much you care about someone you know how to write down your emotions keep that is a very good quality