'laughter dying in his throat'
genius
the whole poem reflected the wrong doings in society
loved it 5/5

That was beautiful :) Such a sad poem, but it had a great ending, and t really mad me feel so insignifacnt - Not a bad thing, don't worry :)

5/5

Peace. [Sole]

Great work. Its just so true. 5/5

Good job. i like it

Another masterpiece. I can just step into your poems...I love it....

[lostlaureate- come find me]

Absolutely amazing. It is nice to see that someone is putting themselves in someone elses shoes. Don't dwell there, however, you may get lost, and, in turn, lose yourself in them, becoming them.

Kalika

What an interesting and very thought provoking write. I've never really heard it put like that before. I liked the reference to different life issues that you talked about, it certainly gave the poem some realism. You kept the flow going through out the write and had me gripped to the very end.
The only criticism I have is in the second stanza the full stop at the end of the second line isn't needed there. If you want punctuation, I suggest a comma instead.
Also, I didn't understand what you meant by "...put that away" on the last line of the eighth stanza.
Good job.

ps Thanks for putting me on your favourites, I don't think I have told you are already on my favourites, so I'm glad the feeling's mutual.

This was truly a magnificent piece. There are words being whispered to me when I read this, words beyon the words written here. Keep it up!!!

p.s: you spelt feeling "feeeling", might want to fix that!

Oh, my. I am in aww over all your poems and this was just perfect and true and imaginative and lovely to read.
xxxx