I’m speechless. This poem is far better than I thought it should be.
I loved the way you went into details. You seem like a really
Thoughtful person. And you described our society today perfectly.
I loved that part you say “I need the serenity of the insanity”. I
Think it’s quite true. We all need that sometimes to cool down.
And I liked this part too:

I watch the iron being welded
and told it has to be something else
To fit in

The way you talked about iron but you actually were talking
About ourselves.
And this part below is quite true. It really is:

Yet people come and go
and see nothing

The ending was good too david. Maybe this poem is not perfect
But to me… well, I couldn’t find a word that had to be changed.
And now you go straight to my favorites list.
I read more of your poems later.
Take care,
Marjan

P.S. thanks for the comment.

The truth in this is haunting. It's a very powerful message that would do society good to listen to.
Your attention to detail really brought this piece to life.
And I have to say, that the ending completely blew me away! It's so bold and raw....very nice!
Take care and keep it up~Holly