For your first poem that was pretty good.
Try and lengthen it to about 4 stanzas.
You can edit it if you want, i liked it
~Emma

I told u alreday i liked this. but hey, every comemnt counts. keep going and keep lengthening : )

cya round
-Snoo

Hey,

That was great work man. I like it because I have always had a thing for repeating poetry. One comment, please don't fall into the 4 line 4 stanza rut, I think you have huge potential.

Cya round,
Matt/GA