Good start...I like the closing lines....they just jumped out at me....you're scaring me with your ability to craft the english language in a way that fits your heart...truly stunning....come help me out with some of my first poems on the site...

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Nice. i feel like slapping that chick. really hard. you have some typos and stuff. but its good. esp for a first poem. you should def write more.

Minor tense things. Easily fixed.

One of the better love poems I've read recently. I think you should write more to showcase your talent. The organization is amazing and so is the concept of the poem.

Wow. You really show your emotions well. Hope to see more good things from you.

Good progresssion and organisation in this peice, and the expresion is very well protrayed thoughout the entire peice.

5/5

"For you I could do everything," This line stood out to me the most, it was like I could have done everything for you...but you wouldn't let me...
Such a sad and emotional poem...the 4th stanza seemed the best to me as it was a dramtic change from the other verses and the repeition really hammered in the point "you" is really direct
This was such a good poem to read...keep writing!!

Great job. Try to add more imagery

Lots of emotion comes out in this one..... you can feel the pain in it, good job

Lots of emotion....loved it...love poems are your thing...very well written....5/5!