Comments : Life on earth

  • 14 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was good....But...It kinda ruined it how you had such long stanza, And then turned into little lines, It was good. I like how you did "If I'm stuck on earth
    I die"
    That was cool! 5/5 =]

    luv natz x0x

  • 14 years ago

    by Kaylee

    You should cut that one long line into two seperate lines. Also I would reccomend upper casing you i's. Also I think you mean destroying: Building, mating and destroy.

    Nice idea but I think it would have been great if you went in depth either descriptions or emotionally. 4/5

  • 14 years ago

    by firexflys

    Very intresting. lol it was a good thought and somthing to think about nice job

  • 14 years ago

    by azlan26

    'and I don't want too' - that should be to not too
    thats my fussy bit over
    the rest speaks right to my heart
    i love the use of humans as ants, it emphasises our alikeness to other creatures
    keep writing :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Jenny

    Thoughtful poem, great! really made me think, keep up the good work.

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by A Broken Bleeding Soul

    I love the last few lines of the poem. The last part makes complete sense. Awesome way of ending it. 5/5

    - Thanks for reading my poem -

    ~ Tina

  • 14 years ago

    by Alex Marlatt

    To true sadly, but small parts of humanity are trying to stop the wanton slaughter of the earth. I liked the message anyways good job

  • 14 years ago

    by Sole

    Nice poetry - I really enjoyed the effective last few lines, and thelast line strikes a great impact on the reader.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 14 years ago

    by LiL K

    Wow...this poem is so different and intrigueing..I love it!

    "The world is changing
    and I'm just a bystander
    Watching as mankind destroys,
    destroys itself with its knowledge"

    I love this stanza because it's so true! Good job...5/5

    Thanks for your comments

  • 14 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was cool. Maybe you could make it a little bit longer, But it was still good. Keep it up =]

    luv natalie x0x