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This was good....But...It kinda ruined it how you had such long stanza, And then turned into little lines, It was good. I like how you did "If I'm stuck on earth
That was cool! 5/5 =]
luv natz x0x
You should cut that one long line into two seperate lines. Also I would reccomend upper casing you i's. Also I think you mean destroying: Building, mating and destroy.
Nice idea but I think it would have been great if you went in depth either descriptions or emotionally. 4/5
Very intresting. lol it was a good thought and somthing to think about nice job
'and I don't want too' - that should be to not too
thats my fussy bit over
the rest speaks right to my heart
i love the use of humans as ants, it emphasises our alikeness to other creatures
keep writing :)
Thoughtful poem, great! really made me think, keep up the good work.
by A Broken Bleeding Soul
I love the last few lines of the poem. The last part makes complete sense. Awesome way of ending it. 5/5
- Thanks for reading my poem -
by Alex Marlatt
To true sadly, but small parts of humanity are trying to stop the wanton slaughter of the earth. I liked the message anyways good job
Nice poetry - I really enjoyed the effective last few lines, and thelast line strikes a great impact on the reader.
by LiL K
Wow...this poem is so different and intrigueing..I love it!
"The world is changing
and I'm just a bystander
Watching as mankind destroys,
destroys itself with its knowledge"
I love this stanza because it's so true! Good job...5/5
Thanks for your comments
This was cool. Maybe you could make it a little bit longer, But it was still good. Keep it up =]
luv natalie x0x