Me again dropping by your page.
Maybe it doesn’t seem very important to you and some
Other people but I liked the way you said, maybe this
Or this or maybe… .
And again you showed your talent at using similes in
This poem:
“…Maybe to the children who open their
Wrists like letters hoping that the
Words…”
And in this part too:
“The leak in the Titanic of life”

I liked the way you wrote this part too:

Or maybe like the prayers of 6 billion people
In 6 billion religions with
6 billion different gods
All striving for peace

First you wrote about the differences of people and religions
(Which seems no good) but then you mentioned that everyone
Is looking for the same thing and has the same purpose even
Though they may not know it themselves and even though
It may seem they walk in different paths which is a way to
Make a poem better. I mean first you showed the bad points
but then you draw the attention of the reader to the good points.

And about that part you say: “6 billion different Gods”
I think it’s just 1 God with 6 million different names.

take care,
marjan