Comments : X Nightmares

  • 13 years ago

    by azlan26

    My god this is deep
    Oh dear
    But extrememly good =]

  • 13 years ago

    by zac

    I loved the imagery you've painted with this...

  • 13 years ago

    by Jonathan

    Very good poem. I really like the flow.
    Good job.

  • 13 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    Strong imagery. Everything really penetrates my soul....painfully so...the nightmares are lifelike...I cannot get my head around how you manage this with words so well....I'm not just saying this...but this...this is good.

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

  • 13 years ago

    by Alex Marlatt

    "Flicking through the pages of nightmares
    Watching the clock of dreams tick by"
    That is a good technique that indicates importance, not many people use it. Everything was good.

  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Imaginative, and deep and well written.
    loved it
    xxx

  • 13 years ago

    by Shawna

    Great job!! I love the ending!!
    -Winged devils rest who once did fly-
    I've never thought about nightmares like that before!! Great work!! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    Wow. This was great! You've done a wonderful job on this piece.

    "A sorrowful movie, the pain of night
    Drunken humour tells a lie
    And sets to rest the nightmare-weavers
    As the grasp of fate does slowly die"

    -- In the last line, I think it should be reworded, to be frank. Something like.. "As the grasp of fate slowly dies". Just my personal opiniion, though.

    Five out of five.

    ``Briana

  • 11 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Good Poem... Really :)
    Keep up this good work :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Minkus

    5/5. Very, very well done... I enjoyed the diction, the rhythm, the construction of the lines. These poems are why you're on my favorites list.

    Two things: consider changing "sorrowful" in line 9 to something less... overdramatic isn't exactly the word, but it's close. Secondly, "winged devils" shouldn't have an apostrophe since it's plural, not possessive.

    Nevertheless, excellent work. One question: Why the X's at the beginnings of the titles?