I'm not sure if the last line needs the can you see? But that may just be me being picky
I love the use of rain, its one of my fav. poemy thing :)
Nice one again =]

I loved the last stanza, nice strong finish! This was so emotional and literally moved me....great stuff. In particular the structure and choice of words really gave this life....awesome!!

[lostlaureate - come find me]

I love it you are so talented great poem

WOW.. i really really liked it.. its really powerful your very talented keep it up..

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

I'm telling you now, please stop,
One of these days I'm gonna be stretched way too thin,
I know you hurt inside just as well,
But I hurt, too, you have no idea where my heart has been,

I don't know about that stanza it kind of threw it off but it is a different approach to a sad poem. Nice to see someone daring to take a risk and show something new.

Hey good poem ya got talent

I know how you feel sadly enough. I can really relate to how you feel in this poem. Very sad, pretty dark, I enjoyed reading this. Keep it up.