So ture people frist push you off a cliff, and when you lay broken at the bottom they ask if you need any help. people are either really stupid or just really evil. but in any case cool poem, you got skill.

Wow sweetie, Thats sad!! Hope everythings ok. You know im here if you need to talk!

Much love, Your favouritest cousin in the world

natalie x-x-x

Good poem. Flowed really well and the emotion was obviously present. Each staza added a new jump-start of feeling and by the end i was sitting on the edge of my seat (not quite sure why...but thought it was important) anyway great poem. Thought it was great, because people can suck, they don't want to take responsibility for things that are their fault and they brought about. Eh, what do you do? Take care.

OMG! this poem was so cool keep it up! i gaved it a (5/5)

Wow this is so sad! i neva understand how people dont notice the slashes on peeps wrists - maybe they choos not to. Great work but if you bear guilt its bear not bare. bare is like there is nothing there

I realy like this. its awesome. i could be a little deeper. really touch on the guilt that the people feel. but i like it the way it is too.

Great write i thought it showed excellent emotion in it.... 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

Coz you didn't stay strong and tough.
Maybe it would sound better without the coz.
It could have been deeper. Make us feel the guilt :) But with the fact that you wrote "you" I think it's meant to make us feel we're in the characters place somewhat. The title was chosen well. The stanza mostly flowed decent. I just think you should try and tap into your writing talent and see what could come from that.

This is really good. I feel you could have explored the emotion deeper, but there is no doubt that this is terrific. it flowed really well and grabbed me in. great doll.

Kat

Love ur poem...its so kewl