Comments : A Poem For My Daughter

  • 18 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    Wow.... I guess its hard to say very much because Im not a mother, just a teen. But this poem is amazing, everything is soo true the way you state how your daughters feelings could go in either direction. But I'm sure as she gets older and understands more you will be her Idol, because she will see how hard you have worked. That poem reminds me of me and my dad, I actually had tears in my eyes!!! That was a great poem to read:)

  • 17 years ago

    by misty

    Being a single mom those are all things that run through my head everyday. Being raised by a single mom, I know that she couldn't do all the things my sis and I wanted to do because she loved us. It was so easy to read what was in your heart and all the conserns you have about your child. What my mom taught me and I now do with my daughter is this...be realistic! If you have to choose between washing dishes or going for a walk with her... walk with her...the dishes will be there when you get back but each moment with her is fleeting! If you have to choose between drying your hair or having a tea party with her...put it in a pony tail cause the only person who doesn't care what you look like will think your beautiful nomatter what. Your heart was in the right place and you could read every emotion so easily. Stanza wise, it could use a little work. Depending on the type of poem, there should be a certain beat and at times I got lost in it. like if line 1 has 4 beats and line 2 has 3 then line 3 should have 4 and line 4 should have 3.

    here's just an example..
    "A little girl so precious
    Her eyes so baby blue
    How I would like to play with her
    But I have so much work to do"

    A better way would be..
    a little girl so precious
    her eyes so baby blue
    how I would like to play with her
    but i have so much to do

    Other than that this piece was great and keep up the great work.