I love this poem too. You're a great poet. Nice flows in all you're work I've read thus far. 5/5

Wow this is sad. And so true. You should live life to the fullest! Or atleast try too. It was a great poem! Well done 5/5

luv natalie x0x

Wow, that was sad. I liked the rhymes, they were good. The flow was well done, and everything made sense. Nice work.

That just made me look at life a little differently. You are right too. We have to use our time wisely because we never know when our time will be up. Great job.

>black&&blue

Something about the use of shamed seemed incorrect to me... I would change it to was ashamed, but that is a couple more syllables.

That was really good. and very true keep up the great job ur work is really good. 5.5

Wow...amazing again. You really know how to get your thoughts across. Amazing job..

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

This poem was written pretty well with keeping the syllable counts basically constant and the rhymes were okay. I wasn't into the reptition of shame and a few other points but you managed to keep them fromsticking out and blend into the poem.

This poem makes me think that we have to spend as much time together as we can!!!!
Strutting our stuff while we are still beautiful and then tucked away with each other when we arn't.
..xx