This has been well thought out. It is so cleverly written...not bad for a first...you definitely have to put up more...so many oxtmoron's and the imagery is stunning. I'm luvin it!!

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Well done for a starter poem Hun! your vocabulary astounds me =) I'll be happy to welcome you to fish bowl *My club* When you answer me this, Why us? lol your application didn't contain anything, or atlease my computer isnt showing anything. and I don't normally ask but you are a new member so it sends me a courious =) but either way I'll be happy to have such talent in our lovely bowl. Like I said In the hea dof teh club, my names Jenn, fighter and >tornapart are the assistants and we'll be happy to help in anyway we can. =)

love always

Hey there hun! *grins* read ur post! jenns a grumpy bum sometimes *jokes* a big welcome 2 the club. *sighs* u have captured my heart girly! my favorite thing about poems are the wording that people use and this was STUNNING! *grins* it's an awesome poem and I'm guessing it isn't ur first one ;) anywaze keep on postin! i'd love 2 c more... just ask 4 a comment in the comment post at fishbowl and I'll be there *grins* c ya! *hugs* ruthie xoxo

Excellent Poem wow i love all the dicton you used...im practicly speechless...oh btw im Joclyn or Jocy for short and id like to welcome you to the fish bowl....i hope you enjoy the bowl and your fellow fishys....ne way welcome...Jocy

I loved the different word choice here and it seems really thought out. I'm amazed by how you made this one stand out by going more in depth with your words.

Wow... amazing. It flows together so well. I loved it. Great job 5/5

- Thanks for reading my poem -

~ Tina

I also happened to love the word choice.. not many people go that into it ( if that made sense) it was amazing it had a great flow to it also.. keep it and as always keep writting!!! 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

This poem is so good. i loved it. you are very talented. it was very well thought & nicely written. great job. 5/5*

Wow those were some amazing words. they conveyed your meaning really well. nice job!

I think your writing may be a little deep for me! lol! :D
PV

Great structure - the sections worked really well. Great flow, though a few of the longer lines knocked it a little, and the rhyming was really good as well.

Peace. [Sole]

I enjoyed the large variety of words you used in this poem. They made the entire poem very colorful and structured. It was a great poem, I liked it alot. Though I wish you had more poems I could read. XP

I had no idea anyone could use those words like that....ur not trying to sound smart but at the same time ur a very imaginative poet....keep writing no matter wut..! thx lots for ur comment...
love ya lots,
sore

Ooooo! I liked it alot, i really liked the way it came out. keep writing!

Amazing.
Wow.
I loved your use of vocab.
Just wow, Very well thought through & a delight to read.
Well doooone!
x

Another great poem by you, you are a talented writer. keep up the great job, another 5/5 from me.

That was a great poem...keep writting..have fun!! please comment and rate my poems...thanks ~DARK~

Wow! this is really good. It all flowed and ryhmed nicely. 5/5

Wow! This was amazing, the flow and imagery were great. 5/5