GREAT JOB BOTH OF YOU!!!!!! OMG I normally don't read nature poems but totally loved this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Kristy- my sister, your writing is so awesome loved how you worked your imagination in this
Darien- my sexy Boo your so amazing as well!! i couldn't even tell what Kristy wrote and what you wrote!
Excellent you two, keep writing together you do an awesome job!
5/5
Chelsey-Lynn

Awww! This was beautiful lol. It had really good imagry and I liked how there was alot of stuff in there about the beach. It flowed good and the rhyming was good too. Can't you just write one bad poem for me? So then I can say something bad for once? Lol.. It was really good =D 5/5

`Taleeee xx

P.S. Post that new poem alreadyyyy =P lol

"But the stars will be shining so bright
And tonight there is a full moon"
future tense then present tense, you should standardize it, most likely to:
"and tonight there will be a full moon"
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"Palm trees sway in the evening breeze
Casting playful shadows on the sand
An endless game of cat-and-mouse
That no human can understand "
my favorite stanza, particularly for the game of cat-and-mouse line.
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This was a great collaboration, I couldn't tell who did what, it flowed together so well. The imagery was great, as were the details present.

Very wonderful poem Darien