Juls,

This is bloody amasing, the swtich of style the flow, the subject this is all blowing this fish out of the water! wow babe, wow. I'm so proud of you, you really turing into the poet your ment to be. Never give it up like me. This is frikken ace!!!!!

Jenn

Ps: Fave part

Not visible to the forsaken eye

Unable to see the truth,
that was lied before their eyes

Hidden, like an animal in the night

Searching in light, but still
cant be seen before their sight

Stunning!!! wow.... im in awe. you truly are talented. keep up the phenomenal work!
-xXx-

Oooh i really like ur poems! that one was very effective, the layout and wording was great! 5/5 xxxxx

Feeling locked, caged in.
Anything else but the feeling of free.
[I loved those lines. They were really good! Also a great way to end the poem!]

I thought the way you opened up the poem was great. It was a great poem from start to finish. Nothing I would change at all. Keep it up! You're a great writer!!! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.