That's cute, especially the last line. The only mistake I noticed was you used "grew" when you should have used "grown". Other than that, it was a very sweet poem, I hope you showed it to the girl it is about.

Ur poem was very insightful. it shows how deep ur love is n how much u r willing to fight to keep it.

Awwww. ur poem was touching, heartfelt and full of passion, definitely 5/5, da girl in da poem is v.lucky 2 have sum1 write so creatively and passionately about her!!!
xxx