Nice lines keep the thought moving. You did well. Just remember no matter what someone says all good poems come from the soul so if you got your point across then thats all that matters.

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!!! that poem was very nice and I enjoyed reading it
Its poems like these that make me happy I happened to come upon them
Great job and keep writing porfavor (please, haha)

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