I'm reading this and the only thing I can think is, "Wow what a dream." Your poem wasn't made out to be a dream I know but to me it was with that picture painted so vividly in my mind. I can still see it. Now I wish I could draw because it would look so lovely. I'm amazed. It's not only an adorable poem but even though at first I was going to suggest breaking it up, it kept my attention all the way through.

Great job!! My favorite part is

You're my dream, my fantasy, everything I long for
I know my heart is safe with you, I know you won't make it soar
I love you a lot; that's all I want you to know
Stay with me in this moment, don't ever go...

anyways your an excellent writter keep on writting!! 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

I love this poem!!! ♥

good job

--:CinDy

Awesome, though I think that

take away my every freight

should perhaps be

take away my every fright

Unless you are a freight train??

Hope I help xD

Peace. [Sole]

That was GOOD! I could picture it almost perfectly..Good job! Thanks for commenting on my poem!!

~Always4You~

Omg that is the sweetest thing ive ever read!!! wow i lve it...5/5!!

This poem is very good! I love the way you describe things so well. great job! 5/5*

Beautiful poem Stef! I loved how each word simply ran through my mind like honey. It was simply and utterly beautiful. Good job!

Thanks for the comment =)

i really like your poem
nice job!

--:CinDy

This is really beautiful piece of yours! I could just imagine what was happenning. how you describe it all was fantastic. i felt at times it didnt flow but i loved every minute of it. you really captured it and its really sweet. =D

Kat

Wow, amazing write. I loved it. Keep up the good work.

~Joe~

Aww another really really sweet poem...you write really good love poetry
Again the only flaw I can seem to find is that the lines are a bit too short/long is a few places...but thats no biggie
Great stuff