Very good! ive never seen better story keep it up

Great Poem, Once again you Grab the Readers attention so quickly, Makes us want to keep reading, Beautiful Poem :)
Godbless
Colt

Great poem, I liked it a lot because I could picture myself in your position. Keep up the good work.

-Jason

Thats good a bit sad with the thingy that happend and all xoxroxyxox