I liked it. I thought it was beautiful with the last line. I did think this one part could be changed if you wanted more effect, though,

Nights are no longer full
living an empty life
your mind never shifts from it
what am you to do with my life

You have life twice in the same stanza that I think it sort of takes away from it. Maybe just cut the last line. It's up to you.

But I also thought the repetetion of life towards the end was different because it kind of worked well.

The organization was there, as was a nice title, and most word choice was good. 4.8/5

I thought it was really well written, emotions expressed well, great to read, overall a great job
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Wow, awesome Job! I loved it. The Ryhme and Flow is superb. Keep up the good work.

~Joe~

Vivid, varied and full of vitality!
Very profound and colourful language....

Great stuff!

[lostlaureate - come find me]

This is pretty good. your rhyme is perfect and really moves the poem along. i love it. nice job!

Great poem.