I liked dat, it waz sexy.

Aw i loved this poem! very descriptive. 5/5**

Just the 2 of us with between us a candle shining bright
I think with the word us used twice it was a bit awkward. And the cuss word in it but that's just me. The sentences though were vivid most of the time. Title: beautiful. Really.
I don't know much to say than that

I really like this. the only thing id have to point outis using us twice ine one line. seemed a bit,awkward? as said up above. i really like your description of things it really makes it stand out which creates elements and visuals for the reader, which is abosolutely great. it was really good.

Kat

Wow this is beautifully written "a touch of sand" is still my favorite one of yours that i have read.. but this one is also brilliant .. great job 5/5

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~!*Meaghen~!*

Wow, awesome Job. I loved it. Very well written. Keep up the great work.

~Joe~