Aw...so sad & full of emotion. great job! 5/5*

This was a very strong poem. An example of a somewhat short, dramatic, good poem that did not rhyme. It is very good.

A)Title. Loved it. Strong, dramatic.
B)Concept: Not knowing why the girl's hurt. Makes people relate.
b)Emotional element. Sadness and isolation for the girl. After a minor (I say that because I'm still in denial it was all bad) abusive relationship I felt like the girl.
The tears will not be seen
For their eyes are closed
They don't want to see the pain
It will force them to remember
Keep it locked away, it is safe
No one can judge there
D)Overall. Minor things to-too and i-I. Easily fixed. Exclaimation point try and limit to one. The rest, wow, simply amazing. 4.9/5

Very very deep and touching...

This is deep. heartfelt and has alot of emotion to spread. very strong.

Kat

I really like this line

A mother reaching for 'her' daughters hand

thats me and my moms relationship.. so true.. and i love it again 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

Very deep well constructed peice of writting. the flow is good and the content amazingly portrayed

You are great at expressing emotions in your writing. this is very good.

Aww, This sounds like you have a daughter? If so, Shes very lucky to have a mum like you =]
But I really did like this poem, It was full of emotions, And the wording choice was great! Keep it up =]

luv natalie x-x