Hi look im not a "poetry writer" just a girl who writes based on emotion, and this good!! real good it expresses your anger, your hurt and just pure emotion...good on you!! excellent

WOW! This was EXCELLENT! I know good poetry when I see it, and this is one of the best. Good job! And I know how you feel. I described something alot like this in one of my poems called Hammer of Problems. Sometimes all people want is to share the pain.

-Artimis-

A)Title. A bit hesitant when I read it and thought oh no not another one. Proved me wrong.
b)Concept. Been in a bad relationship where the boy told me he tried to commit suicide. Tore me apart emotionally that I was afraid to break up. Things got worse to the point where I had the choice of filing charges. Didn't and continue to feel trapped even when he was not my bf. That's how I relate.
Emotional Element: Anger, hopelessness. Perfect.
Overall: 4.9/5. Some lines could use more detail.

Excellent poem, i liked it alot. The way how you discribe it, just amazing lol
except for the ending this stanza is the best i think:"You cannot break me
For I'm already broken
My crushed little heart
Is now your happiness token"
keep it up =) 5/5

~StefQ

I liked the poem, its a subject i dont usually read about but this was different and well written.
Overall a good poem 4.5/5
love Tara-Kay

I really really like yuor poem its really good!ur talented. love u xoxo

So sad! Great flow, great rhymes, I reall felt your emotion. Also - it's a really imagintaive idea, describing a person as suicide.

Peace. [Sole]

This poem is really powerful..a lot of people will threaten to kill themselves to either scare someone n make them feel bad or to get their way...I know of a few people myself.

"You cannot break me
For I'm already broken
My crushed little heart
Is now your happiness token"

....I love this stanza! Keep it up! 5/5

♥ Kelly

Very powerful and expressive peice, tells the story well and maitains interest well

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Its ok hunn..
You will make it through all of this. All you have to do is stay strong. You are an excellent writer. I hope you know that. It is the truth!!!!!!

5/5

Wow.. ur writing is amazing. all ur poems are so emotionally powerful. i love them. this one's my favorite. i like the metaphor and the message..
everything will be okay...:)