Hmm . . . nice ending - relly brought out the emotion that the start of the poem begins to build up. You might want to take a look at the extra /'s and delete them . . . also 'neal' is spelt 'kneel'. Other than that - the rhyming was great, and the flow worked really well - even with the slightly longer lines. Nicely done.

Peace. [Sole]

Once again tears. Ur probably tired of hearing that. But this one hits me in a rough place. Life sucks don't it...

Good poem but it would be better if you took out the slashes but thats just what i think

Wow thats niiice. it makes my stomach drop and the end was great. esp the last line. deep. nice job!

Beautiful poem, i loved it. It rhymes and flows so good and it's not to long or anything =) also "nice" ending lol
keep it up =) 5/5

~StefQ

Wow the ending to this was great. It really brought out all of the emotions. The rhythm was great.. it flowed well. It's such a sad poem & you pulled it off very nicely. great job! 5/5*

Wow.. a great poem indeed:)

Love,
Line

Awww.. thats so sadd... i loved the ending! it really was perfect.. :) 5/5!!
jessy

It entertained me and there were some highly dramatic moments. Not one of your best but....still a thrilling read...

[lost_laureate - come find me]

Yet another amazing poem. The flow and ryhme were awesome. good Job!!

Peace, Joe

Very powerfully written peice, the feelings are well expressed thoughoput and the content very clear with a good strong plot.

5/5

Capitalize the I's... pleaaaaase. ;)

I love it though, it's written really well and flows great. It's a sad topic but it just works well.

I think this poem's good, though I kind of expected it to be sadder, because of what it says. It's about death, love, suicide, and hate, and I think you could improve it by describing the strong emotions of the situation. I liked it the way it is, so if you don't want to change anything, it's alright.

Good job!

XoXo
Gaby

You were found with a note saying " with out your love i'd die"
((Cliche but I love it so much..))

Very nice poem.. sad though. Slightly Romeo and Juliet like..

xDarkSuicidex 5.5