Wow, That was really cool! 5/5 =]

luv natalie x-x

GREAT job .. short but great.. nice job 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

Very good peice, short but powerful.

You have a great talent here but i think u should experiment a bit more, try to write something a bit different by changing your usual structure and rhyming pattern adn , as i said before, maybe a happier subject (although you seem well inspired by this subject so perhaps you could just write another poem with a different rhtym or something). id love to read the result as u are definately a good writer!
all the best xx

Wow i really like this. with the shortness and rhyme. its perfect.

:Bleeding the poison
Of so many lies

awesome line