Comments : Architects And Hearts

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I think it could have gone more in depth as far as details. It was really sad and I really do admire the message and how it was written. I just think you really should make it stand out. Write from your soul :)

  • 17 years ago

    by master of shadow

    This is written very well, the story is clearly told and the progression of the peice well composed.

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by azlan26

    Just some quick typos:
    "preety" should be pretty, "werent to" should be weren't too, "shes" should be she's and "shed" should be she'd
    OK now that's all the boring rubbish over
    The poem itself was faboulous
    Really I have never seen this idea used before amd it certainly worked to your advantage...original poems are always the best
    So many twists and turns...I loved it
    Keep writing :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Synh

    Very well written but I definetely think you could've gone further into depth with it. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    I agree with aze. The title worked well and the idea of the architect and your heart was a very unique angle to take on this poem. The ending felt forced but a pretty awesome poem here.

  • 17 years ago

    by Synh

    Very well written and sad. A little more detail wouldn't have hurt but it was still good.