Wow..i really love this. it has so uch description to it that makes it really interesting. and capturing. it has a really good structure to it. =]

Kat

Wow, awsome job. Loved it! I could practically visualize it.. loved it.

Gasping without air
She's trapped now; 6 foot deep
Blood's matted her long hair
Vicious demons start to creep

Great job:D

Oooh, I love this! It's so creepy and just perfectly written.
I'm really surprised at how well the rhymes were, that rhyme scheme is so challenging, yet it didn't sound forced at all.
Well done, truly outstanding piece!
Take care and keep it up~Holly