Great peice, vrey well written (though i must agree with ¡Britt! about the rhyming in places) the flow was good and the content vey descriptive and clear.

5./5

These types of poems are a great way to express yourself. It was a great idea and you wrote it out so beautifully.
The flow is constant and this was a very good read!!!!

This is wonderful! Very well written, wonderful flow. I found your poem very open and educating. Sometimes sad and sometimes hopeful. Enjoyable read!

Okies, thanks for the advice =) i appreciate the feedback.