This was really good. Short lines with alot of emotion! I liked it!! 5/5 =]

`natalie xx

I dont know what to say just 5/5

Fantastic. the short lines work really well and the flow is flawlessly smooth thoughout, loads of feeling in this peice and some very powerfully written lines.

5/5

Wow this is a nicely flowing piece, I enjoyed reading and rating this. I felt really easy to my tongue, thats due to the nice wordings. Keep it up 5/5