It was meant to be short to the point and it is, the last tow lines are the ones that reign down the most impact, and the "butterflied and sparkled hearts" idea is inspired
Wel done :)

Simply beautiful penned, though short but marvellous..have a great day. take care.

Yes short and to the point. And very effective.
And i love the final concept.

A realy fine poem!

Jon
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(thank you for your comments)

A very strong rhythm to this piece accentuates the meanig of every word! beatiful imagery and very natural rhyming, signs of a great writer. you definatley acheived short and to the point, and youve made each word work so well within the poem :) xx

Lol, u write too much, yeah thats r8 :P
ur poem was really inspiring and heartfelt..I like short meaningful poems!!! they can be SO sweet!!!
luved ur poem hun
P.S dont say love won't work out with you..maybe he wasn't the right person =)
always believe in love
Luv ya
NemO XxXxXxXxX

Yes, it is short and to the point but at the same time its very beautiful and gets your message through. I love the wording and just all together the way it was written. The first to lines are my favorite. Not really sure way, they just really got my attention.

5/5, West

Short, but very nicely done

Short but a very nice poem!..i liked it...keep it up!
~*Linz*~

Hey thats awsome i really enjoyed it...short but incredible... thanks for sharing :) 5/5

Awesome poem. Love the way it is written and it was defenitely to the point. Very nice.

~Brooke

Its quality not quantity and this oozes quality...very sad but I loved the rhyme. There is a love out there for everyone you just have to look in the right places..

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Another wonderful poem from you. I loved the way it's short and straight to the point. I can relate to this one also and even though it's short, there's alot of information in it. keep up the great work :)

Wow although it was short it was very amazing! I love it!

Wow this was great!!! you did an awesome job getting it "short and to the point" im not exactly that good at that. Wonderfully Done 5/5 PS. i dont think your poems need punctuation and i think its great just the way it is... the way you made it. -Jen-