Great peice, go dflow and well composed. the repition of the title thoughout is very effective adding real strengh to the overall peice. the flow is smooth and the rhymes seem unforced and hold the peice together well. the 6th stanza does not seem quite as powerful as the rest, not sure why exactly. but it berely takes anything away from the overall peice and so doesn't really effect the poem as a whole.

5/5

A good piece. Emotional, unforced rhyming, it flows brilliantly. Its a good read.
Love Tara-Kay

I loved it, I can feel how sad everything is. Good stuff. :)

Flows perfectly, good poem

The flow of this poem is what drew my attention. Meaning was there and a message was sent. You're a great writer!!!

OK here is your challenge
Write a HAPPY poem that is to do with the NICE things in your life...I will be throughly impressed
Really I dare you

I like the switch up on the last stanza. Great writing. Keep it up.

The rhyming in this is great, ands theres some good imagery to, very well writen, i lke it :) xx