Heys:) thanks for voting for me!! N this poem's great, fighter n all, yeah, rock on!! x)

This i s a good one 5/5 keep it up, your talent should be shared

I LOVE your stuff, because all your ideas and structure and stuff is SO original! Are you on my faves list yet? Idk. If not, I'll have to take care of that. Your work is BEAUTIFUL! Do you have a myspace? anyway, 5/5! Phenomonal job!
PV

It's really beautiful! 5/5

Hey yeah thanx 4 da luv on my page and yeah its gettin worse but hes movin out so yeah anyways.... do u have a myspace?

Fantastic!

I loved it. First few phrases "usually he's ..."
And then the twist "But now"

That's really awesome.

The end is a bit mysterious. Because the question in my head was "well what's he gonna do?"
And you leave that question for the reader to answer.

^^ Not something you see often.

Very unique. Very well done.

Lotsaaaaaa love
-xxx-

Your a great writer. i think alot of people can relate to feeling so helpless

Well I think all the other comments said it for me, so i'm just gonna say well done.

Thanks for commenting mine!
This poem is awesome....... I love it!

5^ I agree with Mona. I liked the first lines and it's original.

Keep it up. :-)

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror