Very nice. Original, and powerful. It's got a great flow, nothing is awkward. I really like it, good job.

Woah this poem was brimming with sadness and emotion...wishing your life was a lie is what most people spend their time wishing their life ISNT
Oh well..so good hard to place it into words..you ARE talent
Keep writing

This piece made me cry..

"Never caring about our life's."

Wow...amazing job...i love it so much...i am simply speachless...
Emma 5/5

Very sad and touching poem. Thank you for commenting on my poems.

If only we could go back my dad use to hit me i know how that feels
this really hit me well done 5/5

Wow i really love this poem its so strong.. thanks for commenting on my poem was 1st i had written in a while n was wonderin wot ppl thought so thanks a lot.... keep writing i love ur style xxxxxxx all my love

I'm sorry that all these things had to happen to them. People who think it's a lie should be ashamed. This was great MasterOfShadow, a 5/5 for sure! Excellent job.

WOW, very nice poem.. It was a very powerful piece.. and it showed great emotion 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

ps.. Im sorry that happened to you (THE CREEPS IN THIS WORLD)

Aww.. that is really sad and I'm sorry that all of this happened. Things always work out for the best. I hope that you are doing ok. You did a great job on this. You really let out your emotions. Great job on this! Stay strong!

WOW! I don't know if everything in this is based on true feelings. But I can really relate. In ways. My brother died aswell. And I don't talk to my mum anymore. This poem was really good. The fact that you were expressing that what you write about is all true although you wish it wasn't was really cool. Awesome job!! 5/5

`taleee xx